The mix sounds really good to me.
The arrangement however is a bit odd. There seems to be very little musically that keeps the vocal melody and the rest of the instruments together. They appear completely unrelated to me, with no clear melodic hook or interaction between the singer and ‘band’.
But if that was intentional, then it sounds great
after a couple listens I got my sea legs for this one. kind of a jazzy stroll through the day. theres a cool adlib style of some of the instruments that create that casual feel you speak of. enjoyed it much. one thing I thought of each time I listened was at the spot of, “it was my birthday” I naturally held that spot, sort of lingered on it longer than you did. not a big deal of course but it may have added a bit more drama there.
good stuff jet, and for yet again sneaking the lap steel in there
The mix and band sound great. Loving the rhythm section. I think this is one that I might need to listen to a few more times though. At the moment I keep wanting a break in the vocal lines at times. Sort of to let my slow brain take in the song. It could well be a grower.
Mix sounds good as usual! - nice feel throughout though a little outside my usual listening preferences. Instrumentation and vocal all sound good except I thought the bass tone was sounding kinda odd; a round and somewhat hollow sound, it didn’t really appeal to me and I found I was constantly aware of it in a nagging kind of way throughout the song. But I realise bass tones preferences are probably as personal as snares sounds are!
I have to agree, for me this lyric doesn’t really work as is to be honest. While I really like the idea and inspiration behind the lyrics I think there needs to be a LOT more space in the vocal lines, there’s just way too many words I reckon and therefore for me a little fatiguing. I’d be more tempted to pull out key lines and phrases from the original text and build a lyric that way.
Thanks for the listen. While I agree that this one won’t be
everyone’s cup-o-cha I’m not sure there is a total
disconnect between lyrics and music. The music
was arranged around the vocal/words and I thought it
did a good job of complimenting them. But I could be wrong.
Bob, thanks for your review. “Sea legs”, yeah…I think it takes several
listens for this one to gel. Know what you mean about a slightly longer
moment on that line, but we found it held things up. I can always find
a reason to drag out my steel.
John, great to see you around. It was a wonderful creative process and one in which
all I did was sit back and enjoy its unfolding. Oh, and I kept the glasses topped up!
Very happy you liked it. I will pass on your review to the writer!
Funny you mention rap. I was on the brink of saying something about rap in my reply but decided against because I wasn’t so sure you (Jet) would take that very well.
To me, it sounds like in this song the vocal melody is not really related to the other instruments melody lines (like in rap music), but at least in rap music the rhytm in the vocal is strongly supported by the other instruments.
If it works for you then by all means leave it as you wish, you can’t please everyone and your own satisfaction is worth much more than mine
Still much respect from me for the mix though, I wish I could mix like that
The more I listen, the more I like and get it. It’s odd when we come across something a little different to what we are accustomed to or expect. I am listening to quite a lot of bands now that at one time I didn’t get. As you said in my last thread, it’s good to take a few risks.
I notice too that you seem to be getting some jazz feel/influence in your tunes of late. It works nicely for you.