Nice track. I’m gonna agree with previous mentions of the drums being too busy. However, I’d suggest a different approach… to my ears, this tune has kind of a sultry driving feel to it. I think the kick and bass are needed to provide that. I would try a different snare sound only during the vocal segments. I dont even know that I would “simplify” it. The snare hits give it a very syncopated feel that you’d lose if you simplified it. It’s just too dominant a sound and, to my ears, fight with the vocals for attention.
For example, keep the track as it is from 00:00 thru 00:15, then drop in a different snare sound…something much more laid back…maybe even just radically eq it (take most of the body out of it and make it sound more like a brush perhaps???), just get it out of the way of the vocals. At about 00:45 bring it back in.
Nice track! I like it!