Coupla things I’d suggest, Chris. You call it new age, so maybe you’re ok with the length of it, but it seems like
more of a slow rock tune from the point where the vocals come in.
Basically, I agree with Frank. The intro is too long, IMO. It’s the same repeating pattern for a full 1:26 before the vocal comes in, and to me that’s making the song about a minute longer than it needs to be. It might be different if you
had more sounds and/or melodic ornaments coming and going during that intro, but as is there’s not much going on.
My only other nit is with the drum sound. It sounds a bit like it’s coming from inside a box. Is that done with reverb and eq, or is it deliberate at all? I think if you add more low end punch to the kick drum (and to the bass), and
tried to get a cleaner drum sound, you’d have a much fuller, punchier production here. In some modern productions
a deliberate lofi approach is used on drums, usually by using distortion and filters, but this sounds like it wants to
be a more organic drum kit, but is missing the mark.
I love your vocal and the overall composition. It’s got a nice vibe to it.