Once again, thanks for the replies. Your advice goes hand-in-hand with some I’ve received from others.
@shadowfax: Indeed, lack of repetition is my weakness. Some of the ideas really do need to be developed more as well as reintroduced in a later section. Someone told me that this piece was still too mechanical even though it was performed without a metronome. He said I should add dramatic pauses and let the rhythm “push and pull” a bit more. As far as expression with the timing, I have a hard time slowing a piece down. I’m more into music like pop, rock, metal, electronic, anything that moves. It’s against my nature to wallow in a melody for a long period of time, but that may make it more appealing, I guess? I like songs that keep going somewhere which is apparently reflected in my composition style.
Working on this has got to become top priority! 
@Jonathan5456: Someone else told me that the left hand is a bit simplistic and keeps holding back (the 1-5-1 pattern which I use alot). Perhaps if I keep the left hand a little busier with arpeggios and soforth, the song will sound a bit more complex and stay moving better too?
It’s nice to be using sampled piano’s for a change, as sound quality has not been a major topic of discussion, thank goodness. I put a stereo enhancer on the whole song, the width set to max. If you start layering stereo expanders, it drives the volume up quick. The lack of width was something I was noticing too. Any other tricks to remedy that?
Bane